The rutilant light shimmered A vision of beauty caressing The flow of life that’s endangered By chaos, war, and debauchery swinging Their hammer of perception As the one and only Equation for life’s classification Of rank, race, religion all blindly Followed without question, Critiquing is just an objection To a reality that needs annihilation, A rebuilding of ethics, an abbreviation For strength of character that’s Created trends, not followers of What’s Unimportant: superficial beauties, Revamped through surgeries All looking like barbies None too human, as they’re Plastic, artificial, unreal fear Of loosing beauty’s power.
My poetry book, Perfectly Flawed poetry for change, is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.
Malak Kalmoni. Chehab Malak Kalmoni Chehab’s “Oh Ye Flowers” is a strong, thoughtful ode fusing imagery, nurturing symbolism, and moral reflection. It portrays flowers as embodiments of both strength and tenderness — guardians of beauty able to endure life’s elemental trials. Here’s a detailed critique and evaluation.
Overall Impression This poem exudes heartfelt reverence and wisdom, compacting vivid natural detail with a gentle human allegory. Its tone is reflective yet declarative, echoing the classic form of an ode through invocation (“Oh ye peonies…”) and thematic elevation. The integration of light, color, and motherhood creates a warm, cohesive emotional current.
Strengths Evocative invocation: Opening with direct address — “Oh ye peonies, rose buds, hydrangeas, lilies” — instantly establishes grandeur and universality, setting a sacred tone.
Metaphorical insight: The idea that “fragility isn’t weakness” but instead a form of strength and tenderness is the emotional nucleus of the poem — beautifully resonant.
Maternal imagery: The comparison of flowers shielding their blooms to “mothers huddling around their kids” offers a strikingly compassionate visual; it humanizes the floral world with spiritual warmth.
Sensory richness: References to “velvety petals,” “rays,” and “rainbows on petals’ fans” create tactile and visual harmony.
Flow and tone: The poem maintains lyrical rhythm and a reflective mood throughout, befitting an ode’s meditative nature.
Areas for Improvement Rhythmic smoothing: The line lengths vary in flow; adding subtle caesuras or adjusting syntax could heighten the poem’s musical rhythm. For example:
“In rainbows of colors, shapes, cryers” → “In rainbows of colors and silent criers.”
Word refinement: Some transitions (“To the world, that fragility isn’t weakness”) can be made more fluid. Suggestion: “To tell the world: fragility is no weakness.”
Punctuation: Light restructuring of pauses and commas can enrich the recitation pace and emphasis.
Technical Evaluation Criterion Score (out of 10) Comments Theme relevance 10 Perfectly within the ode framework and spirit. Imagery and symbolism 9 Rich and emotionally engaging metaphors. Language and flow 8 Strong diction but can gain smoothness through rhythm. Emotional resonance 9.5 Deep warmth and insight on fragility and love. Structure and coherence 8.5 Clear, cohesive, slightly uneven pacing. Originality 9 Distinct maternal viewpoint and tone. Final Evaluation Overall Score: 9 / 10
A luminous and soulful ode that blends floral elegance with human empathy. Its blend of tenderness and resilience makes it both spiritual and earthy — a graceful meditation on fragility as power.
OH Ye Flowers
Oh ye peonies, rose buds, hydrangeas, lilies, Lift your velvety petals to the sun’s rays Imbibe of its nutrients to grow flowers In rainbows of colors, shapes, cryers To the world, that fragility isn’t weakness, Rather, strength, passion, tenderness Wrapped thorns, prickly leaves, protecting Their treasured blooms, like mothers huddling Around their kids to absorb any plight Before they’re touched by the weight Of disillusionment beautified by the sun’s Rays reflecting rainbows on petals’ fans.
My poetry book, Perfectly Flawed poetry for change, is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.
Marvelous melancholy meandeers Eternally in darkness, entering eagerly Leading a life leery of lies letting your Armor augment your auspicious audacity Needing the support of friends, family, Creating a buffer to melancholy’s Hold on emotions that lend a hand to Overcoming despair’s grip from Loss’s leveling your blubbery heart, Yielding to an overflow of emotions, needing a cap.
My poetry book, Perfectly Flawed poetry for change, is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.
Courage to fly beyond your abilities Takes you farther than when you’re Restricted into the confines of strategies That work only within the limits that are
The core of your strengths, believing That’s all you can accomplish Will invariably render your power into muting Its progression into achieving the lavish
Impossibility of the strictures You’ve established as your growth Is stunted by the bars of your own raptures That you’ve chained into a caged breath
That only takes you no farther Than the nose, tangible, in sight And touch, but believing in the freedom, power Of inner puissance that’s untapped unless you fight.
My poetry book, Perfectly Flawed poetry for change, is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.
Honored to be the first in this contest. Thank you for the topics and your hard work.
Soar with Courage’s
Courage thy name is life, Life filled with life altering decisions Decisions needing mettle, fortitude, Fortitude to dare what seems impossible, Impossible for those cowards, Cowards who prefer their comfort zone, Zone where habits, schedules limit, Limit your growth to stagnation leading, Leading to a prison of your making, Making your spirit dim till extinguished.
My poetry book, Perfectly Flawed poetry for change, is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.
Thank you, administrators, for the honor and your hard work.
You Are the Moon
As the moon, alone in the dark sky, Its light lightens the darkness, like You, whose presence illuminates by Existing alone, emblazon cheer’s bike
That rides an uneven trajectory Leading a life that radiates your flight While you light your path, cautiously You navigate using the kindling within to bite
The darkness with fear that’ll hunger To dissipate your glow of optimism, But your spirit and light will glitter And smolder the fire against pessimism
That oppresses in the night, But, you combat its limitations By letting your positivity soar, a kite Flimsy yet strong enough to conquer trepidation.
My poetry book, Perfectly Flawed poetry for change, is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.
My poetry book, Perfectly Flawed poetry for change, is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.
My poetry book, Perfectly Flawed poetry for change, is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.
My poetry book, Perfectly Flawed poetry for change, is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.
Thank you, administrators, for the accolade and your hard work.
Resurrect Miracles
In a world where faith dissipates, Like fog in the fall skies, creates Mammals, mountains, shapes that face The world, haughty in the knowledge that grace
Is innate and humanity is stamped In your DNA, but while sins have manned A heavy toll on your dwindling compassion It requires the miracle of resurrection
In a bid to elevate humanity from Its downward spiral into depravity that come With a heavy price, souls flaming in hell. It’s time for a resuscitation of what fell,
Sinful souls suffering, I give You a second chance to live A just, compassionate life full Of prayer, communion with GOD, never full of bull.
My poetry book, Perfectly Flawed poetry for change, is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.
Poetry for Change 