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Accolade and Review for my poem,  Ignoring Lies

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab “Honesty is 

revolting against lies,” what an admirable theme, Malak! It is a great feat to oppose deceit! There is so much destructive moral corruption flooding our society with lies that I fear it is becoming dangerous to protest. We must resist and your poem is a beautiful call to that cause. The innocent victims of atrocities are waiting for some sort of justice. We as onlookers require redemption. Your writing is wonderful, so powerfully and profoundly expressed.  The rhymes and rhythm are splendid.  Thanks so much for sharing this superb poem! By, Linda Powers O’Dell

Ignoring Lies

As the media plays its deceptive role
In the humanitarian atrocities taking place,
We witness two radically, opposing
Perspectives playing out without understanding

Which reality takes precedence,
Nor which realities are factual without presence
Of alterations to increase dramatization
That skews perspectives of oppression

And horror of the atrocities faced
By victims of an unending war, as they prayed
For absolution of their sins while witnessing
Death’s magnanimous stealth, stealing

Away an easy end with a suffucating breath
That gurgles out, indecisive if life is better than death.
Who’s to say that opposing deceit
Is NOT a great feat?

Honesty in revolting against lies
Awakens consciousness that pries
Away the screen that’s hoodwinked
Those who wished for ignorance that burdened

Them with the knowledge
Of their own moral corruption on a ledge
That destroys without question
By enforcing rules of misplaced adulation.

©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Accolade and Review for my poem,  Peace’s Breath

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab A beautifully heartfelt, philosophical and ethical poem. Malak. You’ve used the image of the merry-go-round cleverly as a metaphor for the violent world needing peace. How poignantly you describe childhood disrupted, the disintegration of families, the appropriation of cultures, and the expansion of disharmony. You make the subtle point that it’s not enough to compensate murder; we must orchestrate our thoughts, our efforts, to revitalize our intentions to create peace. This inspiring last stanza touches the soul. A superbly written poem with subtle rhymes, a lyrical cadence, powerful images, complex well organized thoughts, an exquisite use of precise vocabulary. Brava!! By Linda Powers O’Dell

Peace’s Breath

Round, round goes the world
In a merry-go-round filled
With laughter, life, violence,
Death in a grim cycle needing peace.

Peace for the young whose
Disrupted childhoods froze
With wars’ colonizing program
To alter countries’ cultures for a flame

Feasting on disintegration of families,
Cultures, languages, civilizations whose priorities
Are fostering longevity by strengthening
Community’s peaceful bonds, wishing,

Wishing for the propagation of unity
Against an army of aggression, violently
Expanding its reach into disharmony
Among land, people, conquerors, passionately

Striving to compensate murder
Rather than an orchestration that’ll ponder
The need to revitalize a willful strength
Embued with peace’s poetic breath.

©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change, is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Accolade and Review for my poem,  Window of Time

Thank you for the honor and your hard work.

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab Wow! “Knowing that joy, eternal, an antidepressant/Is your only rebellion not to live in a cast.” Oof! Bam! Kapow! The entire poem was lovely, deliciously evocative and then you land a knockout blow with that final thought. Nicely done. By Tara Hicks

Such a beautifully sublime poem, Malak, so many amazing images! Time, “mercury slippery,” is a brilliant comparison. You’ve wonderfully transformed the mural into an intriguing metaphorical narrative. The serpent of fear slithers in the branches of an ancient tree upon which scary bats hang. Yet a cardinal of grace sings of hope eternal, of endless time that cannot be stopped. Like that cheerful bird, we must accept the past that can’t be recast, we must “soar in the present.” Being joyous to live in this present, that is part of the eternal, is the way to true freedom. It is a spiritual rebellion! Superb rhyme scheme and rhythm, excellent sophisticated tone and composition. Fantastic, encouraging poem, Brava!! By Linda Powers O’Dell

Window of Time

Through my small window
The world revolves around time,
Time, intangible, like mercury slippery, a crime
Not to stand still and let it flow

Slowly around you as you
Watch the ancient tree’s branches
Reach out to the sun in gnarled bunches,
The resting place for the serpent you

Fear as it slithers from place
To place spreading its evil along
The aid of bats that string you along,
Yet on the other branch rests,  with grace,

The red cardinal whose beauty,
Color, elegance speeds your heart
With hope eternal, limitless in its great
Licenses for carrying hope on wings that flew highly

Into the vastness of a blue sky
Knowing that time,
Rhyming with lime is a transient crime
That can’t be stopped unless you try

To soar in the present
Understanding the past, that can’t be recast,
Knowing that joy, eternal, an antidepressant
Is your only rebellion not to live in a cast.

©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Accolade and Review for my poem,  Angel Wings

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab What a magnificent, brilliant heroine! Building her community through the strengths of her empathy and integrity, she overcomes the forces of death. She empowers others with her hunger for equality  and her devotion to ethics. I love how you feature her hunger for equality, this is the foundation for truly encompassing empathy. This poem is beautifully written, Malak; you’ve created a wonderful poetic form with superb rhymes and flowing rhythm. Your compelling images and organized thoughts sweep the reader along in a most wonderful way. Brava!! By Linda Powers O’Dell

Angel Wings

Her acorn blondish hair frames
Her blue eyed eyes, piercing
In their gaze, all seeing
As her grey wings flutter in rhymes

Whose utter grace have underlying
Silver rays that brighten, coalesce
Atop her heart in blissful radiance
Shining like a star, brilliant in showcasing

Her inner heart filled with humanity,
A hunger for equality that stalls
When faced with impunity that crawls
Inconspicuously, stealthily, stealing

Her ethics, yet, she prevails
Using her empathy, strength
Of will to overcome the killing breath
Of death from peers who quails

From her integrity’s effervescence
She builds her community
Of supports, like minded dwellers, impossibly
Impoverished by their beliefs’ conscience

They empower others and selves
To push forward against trends.

©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Accolade and Review for my poem, QUILL

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab What a lovely acrostic, Malak! To address a personified quill is such an intriguing, rhetorical way to address your theme. Piety and self-restraint are being lost to egotism and self-interest. What delights me most is that it is the quill that has failed to prevent this change by underscoring it, by speaking out, and now the poet asks the quill for advice on how to reverse this change. This irony is poignantly clever! Thank you for sharing this superb poem!! By Linda Powers O’Dell

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab This is a great description of the changes in society! leaving piety and discipline! love of self without restraint! so true! poignantly written! By, Brilla Fernbright

Acrostic
QUILL

Quill, oh quill of yonder years, have you
Underscored the differences of then, now, beyond?
Ill prepared for the demands of a world
Leaving piety, discipline in order to be lost in
Love of self without restraint. Advise us, oh Quill.

©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Accolade and Review for my poem,  Memories, Memory

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab Supremely joyous and uplifting, Malak! Oh those halcyon days of carefree play! “Let innocence flow like a flood” is a beautiful invocation. It speaks directly to our memories. We know exactly what it means without having to pin down the exact meaning of the word. You allow the reader to relate to it personally. You appeal to the truth that all kids are the same. Realization of our shared humanity should encourage us to reject stereotypes thereby restoring our own innocence. You invite us to focus on the freedom, laughter and fun of childhood. A kite is a perfect metaphor, your rhythm and rhyme scheme are absolutely wonderful! Excellent poem about childhood innocence!! By, Linda Powers O’Dell

Thank you Linda,  you humble me with your wonderful words.

Memories,  Memory

Memories, memories of childhood
Long gone, come back, come
Let’s play a song, a game,
Let innocence flow like a flood

Throw, throw away taught stereotypes,
Enjoy the games with all blood
Types, mixed races, all are kids who prod
One another regardless of religious hypes.

Oh to be so free as a child’s kite
No cares about evil, pedophile,
Predators, child abusers, all file
Into a chest locked away in a fight

To stay bright with joy, unmindfull
Of obstructions to laughter’s song
That glides into deadened hearts long
For beauty to brighten the awful

Despair of a dutiful social being
Whose memories of childhood
Spring with cheer, geer, games bold
In their actions for social strictures having

Not been forged, so pushing borders
Is the name of the greatest game
Of childhood’s frame
Where laughter, fun are all starters.
©️ Malak kalmoni chehab

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Accolade and Review for my zigzag poem,  Wonder Naturally

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab A beautiful poem extolling the wonders of all the seasons! Such delightful details:the many colored petals, the trilling birds and sly worms, the frolicking chicks, the falling leaves. These leaves don’t just die;they feed the forest so that it revives in spring after winter’s dominance. These are all sources of natural wonderment! Superb poem!!
Hi Malak, there are several types of zigzag poems. The one I am most familiar with and use quite often indents the lines to form a zigzag pattern. I believe you are using it to mean alternating shorter and longer lines? This is an awesome new form for our list. Thanks for introducing it! By Linda Powers O’Dell

Zigzag poem


Wonder Naturally


Foliage free-flowing
Green, red, petals many colors
Explode in summer bliss,
Spring, beautifying the great scene
With wonder and birds that
Trill as they forage for sly worms
Calling out, frolicking
With mates, chicks, communing to, fro
Nature’s wonderment fly
As they all play role fallen free
Leaves scatter in a fall
Feeding forests with ease, ploy, coy
To rejuvenation
After frozen scenery won.
©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Accolade and Review for my acrostic poem: FEAR, BREATHE,  THINK,  ACT

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab Superb descriptive and advisory poem, Malak, about dealing with fear, the mind killer. It’s wonderfully clever how you show that each of these approaches to fear are complicated, not at all easy. We try to breathe, we hear our fears in our thumping heartbeats. We try to think, we’re confused by impulses to both flee and fight. We try to act, results are so uncertain, we may feel frozen. Excellent images, poetic form, poignant phrases and use of capitals. You are a true master of alliteration. “Morass of a lack of logic,” ” haloed heartbeats,” and “feasting feverishly” are wonderful! By, Linda Powers O’Dell

Thank you for the honor and your hard work

FEAR, BREATHE, THINK, ACT

FEAR
Fear: fast heart beats feasting feverishly
Every time fear ramps serotonin quickly,
Amply avid in avoiding pain, fastidious in
Remaining alive to tell the tale of FEAR.
FEAR

BREATHE  …
Barely breathing, the brain astoundingly
Reveals its respiratory ease, by reviewing
Every fear, entering the data, waiting
Another moment for analysis, wading,
Through the morass of a lack of logic,
Hearing only haloed heartbeats, heaving.
Eternally aware of time flowing: BREATHE.
BREATHE ..

THINK …
Through and push through thinking
Halves my reasoning, homing only on survival
Instead of clarity of thought,
Never receiving the memo of
Knowing that ‘fight or flight’ is all in a knot. THINK.
THINK …

ACT …
Actively, arduously permitting action that
Covers slippery seconds of being frozen, while
Time reveals your success, failure, and your missing fervor.
ACT …

©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Accolade and Review for my poem,  Moves

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Malak Kalmoni. Chehab Superb double tetractys, Malak, that speaks heartbreaking truth! Those thousands killed in war are an indelible image the mind’s eye cannot refuse to remember. Beginning with one and two is clever, a nod to the double tetractys form and a perfect way to allude to how a devastating war may begin with just a few moves. Also wonderful is your ending in bright light, light that forces us to face the truth of war’s consequences. Excellent poem!! By, Linda Powers O’Dell

Moves …

One,
Two wrong
Moves started
In war that kills
Thousands, unspeakable actions paling
When faced with consequences, murders hunt
Amputees, fight
Trauma’s might
In bright
Light.

©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.   It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Review for my poem, Untitled

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab Excellent quintain with a powerful ABABB rhyme scheme, Malak. Your combining fire, a pyre of lava, with all the voices of a burning choir, is wildly creative. Music does indeed rejuvenate, heats our bloodstream, floods us with emotions eating us alive. Superb images and worplay!! By, Linda Powers O’Dell

Thank you for the honor and your hard work.

Untitled

Playing with fire burns you in a pyre
Of lava, streaming into bloodstream
Eating you alive like a choir
Whose altos, sopranos, base beam
Their flooding heat and rejuvenate like cream.
©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518