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Reviews for my poem, Lonely Moon

Thank you for the honor and your hard work. Im humbled by your empowering words

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab really vivid, clear imagery in this powerfully evocative piece. Thanks for sharing. X By Monty Baggins

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab A lovely poem about the moon shining on forest treetops covered with snow. Snow that hides footprints of human activity. In the moonlight the snow may seem lonely, but it may still turn to fun?
Your 9 lines, 5,4,7,4,6,4,7,4,5 syllable count, are beautiful descriptive; they set a compelling scene. Marie Harris, former New Hampshire poet laureate, is well known for experimenting with prose poems.  By Linda Powers O’Dell

Lonely Moon

The full moon shines
Above the forest
Treetops, where winter flurries
Deposit fluff,
White powder solid, hard
Ground hiding signs
Of footprints running, hunting
Loneliness to
Turn to fun alone.


©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️
Form invented by Marie Harris, poetess Laureate

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Accolade and Review for my poem, Love

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab Thanks for introducing this intriguing new Hungarian poetic form, Malak. Clever use of assonance and consonance in the first three lines  that mirrors the lengthening lines, (hon, honey, hopeful,) and then throughout, (lone, loving, tough, lonely.) Excellent contrast of “loving” and “lonely” in a if-you-
have-to-make-a-choice scenario. By, Linda Powers O’Dell

APEVA
Love

Hon
Honey
Hopeful, lone
Loving is tough
Better than lonely


©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

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Accolade and Review for my poem,  Love

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab Thanks for introducing this intriguing new Hungarian poetic form, Malak. Clever use of assonance and consonance in the first three lines  that mirrors the lengthening lines, (hon, honey, hopeful,) and then throughout, (lone, loving, tough, lonely.) Excellent contrast of “loving” and “lonely” in a if-you-
have-to-make-a-choice scenario. By Linda Powers O’Dell

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Love

Hon
Honey
Hopeful, lone
Loving is tough
Better than lonely.


©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Review for my poem, Teita

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab wow wow wow this is absolutely beautiful. Thank you so much for sharing Malak. A grandmother’s unconditional love. I will think of this everything my granny cuddles her great granddaughter on her knee. Thank you. Beautiful. 🙏🏻😊😊🙏🏻 By Natasha Brown

Fantastic. Every word is perfectly placed. Thank you for sharing! Shalom. By, Patrick Darnell

Teita¹

Grandmère, grandma, teita
Nonna, abuelita, babushka,

She sits cradling the baby
In her frail strong arms, her
Arthritic fingers clutching the cover
Swaddling the child, she croons softly

As not To wake the slumbering
Babe in arms filled with love
As white as a dove, she dove
Into her role of grandma longing

For the lost stamina of youth
When she was able to run,
Hop, bicycle for longer fun,
Now she waits on the babe’s breath

With bated breath for a wink,
A squeeze Of her hand,
A snuggle of velvety skin that band
Around a slightly bald head, to her, a blink

And she’d miss all the milestones
Of the growing babe, for her waining
Health struggles with each puffing
Breath to stay another day she owns

With a miraculous innocence
Of pure unadulterated love
That would be lost if the cove
Swallowed teita in the abyss of time’s pace

That’s like lightning when there’s
Joy, laughter,  and love to be shared.

©️Malak kalmoni chehab ©️
¹. Teita, Nonna, abualita, babushka, Grandmère
all mean grandmother

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change, is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Accolade for my poem,  Fate Follows Slowly

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab “Silence is silently golden” is wonderful tmesis,  Malak. This revision emphasizes how the benefits of silence are also silent. Congratulations on such a complex, profound poem. Ambition is a tricky thing. Without it how can we progress? But do we want to live hounded for a few moments of elevation? Should feelings of inferiority be our motivation for defying destiny? To fill the blackish emptiness, to escape masochistic scorching pursuits, requires more than polish. To sit alone is silence may be the ultimate solace. Powerful, impressive poem with awesome tempo and rhymes! By, Linda Powers O’Dell

Thank you for the honor and your hard work.

Fate Follows Slowly

Silence is silently golden and craves
Quiet to fulfill its quiet role
Where falling for the coal
That burns your soul and paves

The way to hounding healing hell
That elevates your status momentarily,
There’s a scorching that’s heavenly
For your masochistic tendencies that fell

From the mouth of a demeaning,
Enraged inferiority demanding
Solace with like crazed minded souls fleeing
The impossible: Karma, fate, destiny crawling

At its slow pace right behind
Your extravagant polish
That hides an emptiness that’s blackish
And finds comrades that comfort in kind.

©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Accolade and Review for my poem,  Fate Follows Slowly

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab “Silence is silently golden” is wonderful tmesis,  Malak. This revision emphasizes how the benefits of silence are also silent. Congratulations on such a complex, profound poem. Ambition is a tricky thing. Without it how can we progress? But do we want to live hounded for a few moments of elevation? Should feelings of inferiority be our motivation for defying destiny? To fill the blackish emptiness, to escape masochistic scorching pursuits, requires more than polish. To sit alone is silence may be the ultimate solace. Powerful, impressive poem with awesome tempo and rhymes! By, Linda Powers O’Dell

Thank you for the honor and your hard work.

Fate Follows Slowly

Silence is silently golden and craves
Quiet to fulfill its quiet role
Where falling for the coal
That burns your soul and paves

The way to hounding healing hell
That elevates your status momentarily,
There’s a scorching that’s heavenly
For your masochistic tendencies that fell

From the mouth of a demeaning,
Enraged inferiority demanding
Solace with like crazed minded souls fleeing
The impossible: Karma, fate, destiny crawling

At its slow pace right behind
Your extravagant polish
That hides an emptiness that’s blackish
And finds comrades that comfort in kind.

©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Review for my poem, Replaced

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab A powerful antiwar protest poem, Malak! The injustice, the B.S, the crimes of petty wars are truly horrifying; you make us feel them to our core. You’ve created an intriguing version of the Pythagorean Triple, Malak. This is how poetry evolves, through innovation on existing forms. By Linda Powers O’Dell

Replaced

Petty wars
Kill victims,
Genders, trill

Their song of death
Injustice wraps
Noose, overkill

Around kin who’s fam
Stuggles covered, and
Erased to hide crimes

Under the B.S. they trill,
Singing a song, oppress
Natives replaced: killers …


©️Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni

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Accolade and Review for my poem, War’s Victories

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab Wow, Malak, a double acrostic, these are not easy and yours is fantastic! Not precisely an acrostic as the ending words don’t always begin with the beginning letter of the line, but I find this to be an exciting innovation. Your vocabulary and images are so stirring, quite emotionally moving! Throughout, you are calling poignantly for peace, for a symphony of souls united. If only all would renounce violence, the “constant and cacophony of death!” Superb poem!! By Linda Powers O’Dell

Double Acrostic
WAR’S VICTORIES

Wallowing in War’s endless cycle of       laW
Amplifyies the voices of victors who      stAnd
Reviewing their accomplishments of destRuction
Steal the visuals of those combating for Survival

Villains of evil violence stand as their      Vision
Issues a constant cacophony of death    Instead of
Carefully striving towards a lasting    peaCe
Tasting its victory as murder is               sTopped
Outlasting the carnage into a        symphOny of
Rousing screams, strikes,                 congRegations
Intermixing races, religions, absolute harmonIes
Eternally standing together pledging symEtry,
Symphony around the victories of peaceS


©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change, is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Accolade and Review for my poem,  Fire, Fire

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab Fantastic use of images of fire, flames, explosions, and burning, Malak! Your thematic repetitions and sharp images make us face directly the tragedies of war, wars fought stupidly for supremacy. By using rhyming couplets, you create a montage of horrors and impending disasters. Congratulations on this powerful protest poem so rich with thrilling images!! By,  Linda Powers O’Dell

Thank you for the honor and your hard work.

Fire, Fire

Fire, fire, burning so bright,
So many fires needing to be put out!

Fires of explosions of wars,
Death and dying vying for supremacies,

Amputees trying to outrun the burning
Fires of bombs, exploding cars, gas hissing

And licking up the flames in flight
To overwhelm everything it touches and brought

New life to the dancing flaming fields
Where farms used to be full of buds.

Fire, fire, burning bright into the night,
A flag of might, as it poors over a fight

To live in love within a world burning
In chaos of its making, sizzling

Like the charcoal grilled bird,
Linked in pain of being burned.

Fire, Fire, burning me inward
As loss and grief drowns me when I had

A burning fire for the future
To look forward to, that’s now a jailer

Of captured dreams, up in flames
As depressing fire rages in a gamut of times

Of blistering hell fires, eternally slithering,
Simmering,  spreading, engulfing, quietly smothering.


©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Accolade and Review for my poem,  Why not ‘Wake Up’

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab Excellent reveille by a poem, Malak; it’s high time that we wake up to the suffering and inequality of this world. By repeating your refrain after every line in the first stanza, you create a powerful sense of urgency; you emphasize each travesty in need of redress. In your third stanza you address our consciences directly as you commend being humane empathetic and compassionate. I note your focus on “colonial consumerism,” no argument here, although almost all governments are inclined to exploit the resources owned by others. Justice and equality should indeed be our twin North stars. Superb poem, bravo!! By Linda Powers O’Dell

Thank you for the honor and your hard work

Why Not ‘Wake Up’?

‘Wake Up’,
The world Is in chaos,
‘Wake Up’
The colonizer is a killer,
‘Wake Up’
The losses keep adding up,
‘Wake Up’
The deafening silence is complicit,
‘Wake Up’
You’re made to feel helpless
‘Wake Up’
Your job is to be aware
‘Wake Up’
Your job is to speak out
‘Wake Up’
Your job is to make others aware

‘Wake Up’
‘Wake Up’
‘Wake Up’

Your conscious is knocking,
Let it in, it’ll remind you of being
Humane, empathetic,  compassionate, striving
To ‘Wake Up’ others with you collecting
Them one at a time, uniting, growing,
In voice and power of the many, balancing
The scale of colonial consumerism compacting
Your goals into a materialistic being
Rather than a human feeling
Others’ plight, and appreciating,
With certitude, what you have as striking
In its simplicity and safety, conquering
The world with justice and equality without blubbering.

Wake Up,
Wake Up,
Wake Up.


©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

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