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Accolade and Review for my poem,  We Did Everything

By: Zac Warden

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab powerful poem Malak, Hard hitting and rightly so! This is a well crafted poem but probably quite difficult to verbalise aloud… it has few obvious breaks or pauses between stanzas and complex word use… The only way I think this could be adequately delivered is then hard and fast, within righteous anger, an emotional outpouring of angst? Or very slowly in a resigned,defeated tempo… mid way would stumble… and it is too good a poem with too important a message to stumble…. I’m interested in your thoughts?

Thank you for the honor and your hard work. This was a spoken poem that’s difficult to render,  but I’ll do my best.

We Did Everything

We did all we could …
Yet, genocide is as deadly as beheading,
Death is as real as your breathing,
Living is as traumatic as a horrifying cloud.

We did all we could …
But child amputees are running marathons
To survive but another day as pawns
Of politics that’s gross as it hammered

That “We did all we could”, clause
That left pregnant mothers to die,
Elderly to fry in fire’s explosive dye,
Fathers to be scattered in pieces in cruel cries

That “We did all we could”, was
Said to assuage politicians’ conscious
While knowing their endeavors were shackled in pious
Prison, whose doctrine permits rapes,

Whose haze in, “We did all we could”,
Evaporates in the fog of time that flies
Without scheduling its prime in trauma that cries
Out to be understood, yet, their voices loud

And proud in the hopeful quagmire of guilt
Of surviving, whole or not, presses
In the abyss of despair where hopeless
Orphaned, erased families, press to built.

©️Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Review and accolade for my poem,  Bodies of Death

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab Profound, amazing poem, Malak! Excellent parallel structure created by the repetition of your first lines. You’ve captured much of the state of the world with forceful images and observations. The compassionate do not rest, refugees find jail, the young die before their time, politicians abandon ethics. True, so true. Great poem!! By, Linda Powers O’Dell

Thank you for the honor and the review for my poetry. I’m always humbled by your comments.

Bodies of Death

Bodies of the world,
Whose blood runs red,
Whose compassionate souls
Never rest on behalf of victims’ hells.

Bodies of diverse diaspora
You’ve run in many directions like magma,
Setting a furor of ambition wherever
You land to prove yourself a better jailer.

Bodies of heavenly death
Speak on behest of lost souls whose breath
Was snuffed too young to comprehend
The fervor to achieve power and behead.

Bodies of the political world,
Your humanity is suspected
Of being lacking in affinity with your
Essence of ethical behavior that’s just not your core.


©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Review and accolade for my poem,  Say Farewell

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab So many awful things to leave behind, amen! Your repetition of Farewell to these losses, traumas and horrors is both powerful and poignant. You portray them with amazing images and intriguing rhymes. I like how you alter your repetition to speak to hope for change and harmony. Wonderful poem, bravo!! 👏

By: Linda Powers O’Dell

Thank you for the honor and your hard work.

Say Farewell

Farewell I say
To another year, slipping
Into yesterday in a blink eying
The world through a backward lense to play

Farewell I say
To war that followed into genocide
Where white phosphorus is a guide
To death that’ll pay and say:

Farewell I say
To colonizers whose dominance
Is nothing but a posturing stance
That rides a high till it lands in grey

Farewell I say
To the muck of horrors that movies
Would fear to display as crazies,
For, to them I lay

My farewell to say:
Leave the people to their freedom
Don’t subjugate, ruin, destroy as you come
To steal resources under cover of pray,

So, say farewell to the grey
Quagmire of losses, trauma that sway
In harmony with nature creating a stray
Wind of change that’ll cross oceans and pray …

©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Review by, Dominique Erecilla Albano,  of my poem, Festive City

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab

The poem does fit the *Christmas Lights* theme— it mentions “blinking lights,” “green, red, blue, whites” that “twinkle at nights,” and paints a picture of a festive city glowing with those lights. Even though the piece drifts into heavier, more personal reflections on stress, loneliness, and gossip, the opening imagery of lights and the festive setting keeps it anchored to the theme.

Counting the lines: there are *26 lines* in the poem (from “Festive City” and “Painted roofs” down to “To try and emulate what others had.”), including the title line and breaking each phrase that ends with a comma or natural pause as a separate line. The two ©️ lines are just attribution and not counted.
By: Dominique Erecilla Albano
Congratulations 👏

Festive City

Painted roofs
On a cold day, running like hoofs,
Their brilliant shine,
It’s just fine
Surrounded by pine
Covered in blinking lights
Green, red, blue, whites
That twinkle at nights
Giving rise to hope
For a future where you don’t mope,
Fall into depression
Caused by holiday celebration
That cost a liver, kidney,
That you can’t live without the key
Of life, for cheer revokes
Loneliness, sadness that provokes
Moodiness, violent cakes
Falling apart As you built a  life that makes
You proud of your veneer
That never touches ethics that peer
Within, making you stronger
For your life is lighter
As most stress is caused
By gossip’s ear, whose vanity paused
To try and emulate what others had.

©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book, Perfectly Flawed poetry for change, is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Review ans accolade for my poem,  River of Life

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab Excellent extended metaphor, Malak, with powerful alliteration that roars like a mighty river! You explore so many ways in which life is like a flowing river. Childhood memories, regrowth and change, beauty and laughter, connecting with loved ones, all are reflected in the rush of waters you ride. Bravo!! 👏 by: Linda Powers O’Dell

Thank you for the review and accolade,  it’s an honor.

River of Life

The river is an allegory for life
It is at times smooth as glass,
Clear as a bell, strong enough to sand rocks
Into the smoothest silky textures.
It’s teamed with life, as different species
Live and let live, while others, more dangerous,
Hunt, dessimate, and devour their preys.

It isn’t enough to see that rivers allegate
To all that is portrayed in life,
Rather one needs to be aware that cycles
In nature are imitations of human life.

The strong prey on the weak,
Large numbered populace impose their belief,
Rather than understanding one another,
Exchanging respect and help to survive
The difficulties that life’s cyclones
Throw your way to test your will, powers
Your unity, compassion,  empathy, and loves.

Let nature be your teacher,
Respect its mightier strength as a lover,
Embrace its touch, reach into the sun to empower
Your steely strength as swelteringly hot as
The magma that bubbles from within
Trying in vain to alligate its worth to that of life not death.
©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon. It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Review and accolade for my poem, FIREWORKS


Thank you for the honor and your hard work.

Acrostic
FIREWORKS

Fire, Fire, Crack and pop as a crier
Instigating happy hollers for New Year
Regretting nothing as the past is gone
Ending a chapter,  starting fresh
With shimmers of rainbows of colors
Opening a hole in the sky with glimmer
Rebuking regret, wholly endorsing Hope for
Kindness, grace will reign in the coming year
Sentencing the fire of Regret into a closed casket.

©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Review and accolade for my poem,  Fiery Wall

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab Almost every line enjambed, lovely consistent rhyme scheme, profound themes, excellent, Malak! This powerful poem speaks so authentically of the historical struggles you reference. How long must the fight against tyranny go on? I love the ironic contrast of the last line, the cycles of shifting power never change. Perhaps we should just tend our gardens. Superb poem!! By, Linda Powers O’Dell

Thank you for the honor and your hard work.

Fiery Wall

The wall finally fell in a fiery
Spell when the sorcerer’s blurry
Vision couldn’t allow for it to stand,
Dividing people through the hand

Of varying shades, races whose
Humanity never fades or cease
The opportunities to rebel
Against the status quo,  like the bell

That hides reality in its stout shape,
Ringing loudly to oppress, gape
At dissidents who wish to be seen,
Accepted, not belittled, hated, a screen

Placed to limit their perception
To force the acceptance of perdition
While the authorities using an iron fist,
Stronger than iron, lighter than carbon, a beast

That needs to feel their power
Propagating, never stagnant, rather
Reigning in tyranny, calculating
Loss as as number, inhuman, weakling,

Unknowing that as they cast
Their spell for power, another will fast
Approach, create a coup, found freedom
In an area filled with boredom.

©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Review and accolade for my poem,  Sounds of War

Malak Kalmoni. Chehab Wow, Malak, you really got to my heart with this powerful poem! All the repeated sounds of war are so evocative, calling up frightful images. I can’t help but think of Gaza, recent example of this terrible fear and destruction. So sad, so horrifying. Amazing images, fantastic poem! Bravo!! By, Linda Powers O’Dell

Sounds of War

Drum, drum, drum,
Drum the stoned bun,
Turn it around and run.

Drum, drum, drum,
The hum of whizzing stones
Drop like bombs on bones.

Crunch, crunch, crunch,
Rush to flee debris from a thump
That hits the head, and you’re dead! No pomp!

Stomp, stomp, stomp,
On the stoned cement
Fallen from bombardment ..

Cave, cave, cave,
Under the hopelessly inhumane
Conditions of decayed bodies, pain …

Rotting, rotting, rotting
Away in the streets, floors underground
With walls, furniture burying you, never found …

Slowly,  slowly,  slowly,
Killing you with death around you,
Within you, captivating you in its horror’s view.

Boom, boom, boom,
The shaking, quaking resulting
In fear spreading like bird songs floating …

Wheezing,  wheezing, wheezing,
Trying to breathe under the rubble
Is like being buried alive in moving sands in a cuddle.


©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518

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Review and accolade for my poem, CHIAROSCURO

Thank you for the honor and your hard work. I always wait impatiently for your comments.  Thank you

CHIAROSCURO
Chained light,
Heavenly bright
Incessant shadow, don’t
Avert the radiance of justce
Reflecting right’s light
Offering hope when despair is
Somewhat easier to drown in, while
Courage to fight the battles of equality
Under the umbrella of darkened power
Revealed in rays that shine a ritulant glow
Over the dispossessed of humanity’s light.

©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518


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Review and accolade for my poem,  Love’s Masks

Thank you for inspiring me to continue to voice my thoughts in writing that appears to be pleasing.

Love’s Masks

Share your inner thoughts, ideas, ideals,
That power your imagination and hails
Down upon you, admiration, envy that entails
You have to choose who needs some derails.

Today, we hide behind our likes,
Our social media personae that drives
Our self-esteem into the grounds
If it’s not up to par with our peers.

Why do we hide?
Is intimacy such a bad ride,
That you need masks to keep all inside?

Or do you soar in flight
Fall, shatter, break, and give only a bite
Out of the ball, then turn it into a free for all?

Love’s power only grows
As love is exchanged and plows
Dissent into an abyss of darkness

Where it’s devoured by happiness
Of love shared and empowers hopefulness
In a world that dictates the reign of the Ego.

©️ Malak kalmoni chehab ©️

My poetry book,  Perfectly Flawed poetry for change,  is available on all eplatforms including Amazon.  It was on the finalist list for the Canadian Book Club Awards 2023.

https://www.amazon.ca/Perfectly-Flawed-poetry-Malak-Kalmoni/dp/1525582518